Hello, dear Writers!
Thank you for making your way to my site, The Blurb Diva! From time to time I’ll post helpful hints that may make your writing descriptions pop and be more exciting. Being both an avid reader of many genres and a writer for decades, I have seen a few things over the years that have stood out to me. So as I see these literary gems of awesome, I will pass them on to you!
So let’s talk about Romance for a moment, shall we?
But, before I start, do me a favor and read this:
Her hair was brown.
Her hair was the color of warm, melted chocolate.
His skin was a medium-brown color.
His skin was the color of sun-kissed honey on a summer’s day.
Her skin was pale.
Her skin was light, like the color of fresh baked sugar cookies.
Her hair was soft.
Her hair was soft like strands of silk, sifting through his trembling fingers.
Her skin was smooth.
Her skin was smooth like a porcelain doll, lovely and delicate. Flawless.
Now, my question: which sentences can you see better in your mind? I would venture to guess maybe sentence number 2?
Descriptive writing is a feast for the senses. As writers, we live in the mind’s eye of our readers. If you add a sensual connection to an otherwise general description, you can make things come alive for the reader. You must tell them what you want them to feel, taste, touch and smell just as clearly as what you want them to see.
Whether you choose to correlate your descriptions with foods or colors in conjunction with other adjectives, sensual or edible adjective descriptions can help you paint a truly vivid picture in your reader’s mind. Like this:
“Her lips were as red and shiny as a ripe and juicy strawberry.”
“Her lips were the color of her passion, a deep and sultry crimson.”
Both sentences are an example of ways you can make your descriptions come alive and speak directly to your reader’s imagination. One of the reasons why I like to use edible adjectives is because we make vivid connections through our senses, specifically our sense of taste.
How so, you say? Well, think about it for a moment. Can you remember the first time you had a sweet and sticky, creamy and delicious vanilla ice cream cone on a summer day? What about a ripe and juicy peach, bursting with yummy syrupy goodness, its sweet nectar just dripping all down your chin?
Now, can you remember eating a food you didn’t like, say a vegetable or something new that you’d never tried before? Was it bitter on your tongue? Was the texture weird in your mouth, maybe grating against your teeth? Did it make you frown and wrinkle your nose, maybe?
All of those things can impact how we remember things and, in part, how positively we associate that memory with something we read, how desirable it is to let it roll all over our literary palette, to taste the words in our minds, so to speak.
So try it out, and see how you like it! Feel free to leave me a comment about how it works for you, too!
Well, that’s it for now, kind readers. Until we meet again!
Live long, love hard and be well read….
The Blurb Diva